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1、1Unit 6 Topic1 Section C 读写课Raising Money学生习作选学生习作（一）Unicef China is trying to help poor children in China. We decide to raise money for it. We think about (think of) a good way to raise money. We will bring home-cooked food, such as cakes, fried rice and fried noodles to school. Then we can sell th

2、em to make money. For example, one yuan for a cake, five yuan for a pizza, ten yuan for a lunch. We will ask our parents and teachers for help. Liu Zhuzhi and I will make a poster; Peng Gongxian, Huang Xiaoqian and Zhang Jialin will decorate the classroom; Xie Pengxins mother will help us cook some

3、food.We believe well succeed and make over 500 yuan. 点评：1、三段式的写作结构很好，清晰了然。2、活动目的、内容和预想结果都写得很清楚。3、总体来说，句子结构相对简单，可以尝试用一两句从句，这样文章会增彩不少。学生习作（二）We want to raise money for unicef. I think we can raise money by street performances. Huan Yuanming is good at comedy, he can put on funny show (shows) to make p

4、eople laugh. Huang Jingjing can sing and dance with Ci Luoye. Fan Junhong can perform magic tricks with Zheng Zhijian. At last, Lin Jingyang and I will put on a short play with all of us. We think many people will like our performances and give money to us. We are not good at drawing, so we will ask

5、 Liu Zhuzhi to help us make a nice poster. We are sure to raise a lot of money and help unicef a lot. It not only can help poor children but also will make us braver. We will be proud of ourselves. 点评：1.结构清晰；2.活动内容分工写得很清楚；3.用到了一些不错得句子结构和词块，如 be good at., be sure to do., not only.but also, be proud o

6、f. 使文章看起来较有文采。学生习作（三）We plan to hold a flea market to raise money. We will bring many old things for sale, such as old books, old toys, old clothes and so on. Everything will be sold in proper price. We will make a nice poster and ask all the classmates to take part in the activity. Mr. Wang says we

7、 can hold the activity in the 2school hall. Its really exciting!We hold this activity to raise money for unicef China. Because they are trying to help poor children in poor areas in China. They help the children to go back to school and to live well (用 better 更好). All the money we make will be sent to unicef China. We are looking forward to helping others. Its wonderful to share love. Lets wish us success! 点评1、用到了新词 flea market, 还用到了被动语态.be sold., .be sent to., 很好！2、写了一些较长的句子，还用到了定语从句，拉高了短文的品质。3、第二段将活动的意义阐述得很充分，第三段很有号召力。整篇短文通顺、有感染力。