高级写作-19及答案解析.doc

1、高级写作-19 及答案解析(总分：8.00，做题时间：90 分钟)一、写作题(总题数：2，分数：8.00)1.PART ONEQuestion 1 The graphs below show the performance of a European countrys manufacturing and agricultural sectors in terms of exports and imports from 1991 to 2001. Using the information from the graphs, write a short report describing the

2、general movements in exports, imports and the resulting balance of trade. Write 120-140 words.（分数：2.00）_PART TWOWrite an answer to ONE of the questions 2-4 in this part. Write your answer in 200-250 words.（分数：6.00）(1).Question 2 The Managing Director of your company or organization has announced tha

3、t reports on performance are to be produced by all departments. Your Head of Department has asked you to produce the report about your department for the Managing Director. Write the report for the Managing Director, explaining: what aspects of your department function most effectively. which aspect

4、 is most in need of improvement. how this improvement could be achieved.（分数：2.00）_(2).Question 3 You work for an employment agency. The following is part of a letter you have received from a customer:The temporary administrative assistant you sent us was totally unacceptable. I certainly will not be

5、 using your agency again when I need temporary staff. Write a letter to the customer: apologizing for having sent the unsatisfactory temporary worker. giving reasons for what happened. explaining why what happened was exceptional. offering some sort of compensation to the customer.（分数：2.00）_(3).Ques

6、tion 4 Your Managing Director has decided that the companys website should be improved and has asked you to consider ways of going about this. Write a proposal for the Managing Director: summarising the strengths and weaknesses of the current website. suggesting new services and information to be pr

7、ovided through the website. explaining the benefits the improvements would bring.（分数：2.00）_高级写作-19 答案解析(总分：8.00，做题时间：90 分钟)一、写作题(总题数：2，分数：8.00)1.PART ONEQuestion 1 The graphs below show the performance of a European countrys manufacturing and agricultural sectors in terms of exports and imports from

8、 1991 to 2001. Using the information from the graphs, write a short report describing the general movements in exports, imports and the resulting balance of trade. Write 120-140 words.（分数：2.00）_正确答案：(This report describes the movements of the balance of trade between 1991 and2001, for a particular c

9、ountry, concerning manufacturing and agriculture.ManufacturingImports increased constantly during this period. The figure shows a rise of $ 4bn within the whole period and no fluctuations are to be remarked.Exports rose from nearly $3bn in 1991 to approximately $7bn in 2001, suffering minor fluctuat

10、ions all the way through. In general, the balance of trade remained slightly positive through the period considered.AgricultureImports increased slightly, ending the period around $1bn over their starting level. They suffered a temporary fall between 1992 and 1994, followed by a steady recovery. Aft

11、er peaking at around $2.5bn in 1999, imports fell slightly to their final value.Exports figure shows the same performance although at level $4bn higher than imports.Consequently, the balance of trade remained markedly positive throughout the period.)解析：解析 该篇较好地完成了写作任务，并且能够涵盖题目要求的全部内容。作者对于语言的使用比较自然，能

12、够较为娴熟地运用动词的现在分词及过去分词做状语。但仍然有少量的语法错误，比如在介词的使用上，单复数一致以及表达准确性等问题上。作者全文布局合理，对于连接词的运用，如：in general，consequently 较好地体现了严谨的文章结构和谋篇布局。文章词汇量较为丰富且用法准确，在表达“大概”这个意思时使用了“nearly”“approximately”以及“around”等不同词汇，但某些词的使用稍欠妥当，比如在介词短语“between.and.”的使用上。PART TWOWrite an answer to ONE of the questions 2-4 in this part. W

13、rite your answer in 200-250 words.（分数：6.00）(1).Question 2 The Managing Director of your company or organization has announced that reports on performance are to be produced by all departments. Your Head of Department has asked you to produce the report about your department for the Managing Director

14、 Write the report for the Managing Director, explaining: what aspects of your department function most effectively. which aspect is most in need of improvement. how this improvement could be achieved.（分数：2.00）_正确答案：(This report aims at outlining which aspects of our department function most effecti

15、vely, which ones need improvement and how to achieve an efficient improvement.First of all, it needs to be stressed out that the majority of the team generally shows a real team spirit, is willing to do his best to prioritize some smooth interactions with customers and is not reluctant to work outsi

16、de the normal working hours.On top of that, every member of the team has been carefully selected for his/her excellent qualifications in terms of negotiating skills and communications abilities.As a result, it came out of the recent survey, conducted with most of our customers, that our department h

17、as an excellent image outside the company.Unfortunately, however, some aspects appear to be less brilliant. As part of our sales force, people spend most of their time on the phone and cannot fit any training course within their schedule. As there is no clear strategy to encourage the employees to a

18、ttend training courses, they may feel guilty to decide to use part of their working time to get a better knowledge on a computer software for instance.This being, said, I strongly recommend to define a clear strategy encouraging people to register, at least, to two training courses, each year.This w

19、ould help them to understand that, whatever their initial qualifications may be, it may bring benefit to both them and the company to improve them.)解析：解析 该习作基本完成了写作任务，题目所要求的主要内容大致包括在内，但一些重要内容仍未能详尽陈述。作者对于词汇的运用基本准确，对于衔接词如 first of all, on top of that, as a result, unfortunately的使用上较为熟练。全文布局合理但稍显松散，如第二

20、第三自然段就可以合并成一个自然段，最后两个自然段也是如此。本文语言基本准确，有少量的语法错误，如一个句子中出现了两个动词而之间没有连接词的情况。有些句式使用较为口语化，如 this being, said.但这并不影响读者对于全篇文章内容的理解。(2).Question 3 You work for an employment agency. The following is part of a letter you have received from a customer:The temporary administrative assistant you sent us was tot

21、ally unacceptable. I certainly will not be using your agency again when I need temporary staff. Write a letter to the customer: apologizing for having sent the unsatisfactory temporary worker. giving reasons for what happened. explaining why what happened was exceptional. offering some sort of compe

22、nsation to the customer.（分数：2.00）_正确答案：(Dear Sir,In response to your letter of complaint about the employer you received from my company, I would like to apologize. We know and understand your complaints hut we really care about our customers and that is why in this letter we will try to give our re

23、asons about what happened.The person you received last week was a lier. One week before you asked for the employer, this young man came into my office and told me he was an administrative assistant and showed me his CV. In the curriculum he presented to me, he was wonderful, it said that this person

24、 was graduated from Oxford University with a wonderful average, and his work experience was very extended. Two weeks ago I heard from a friend that this young man bought his CV and did not have it.This is the first time in the history of my company that this happens. I would like to tell you that th

25、is case was exceptional. This young man came to my office for certain circumstances but I am sure this will not happen again. But to be sure the next time I get a CV I will call to all numbers written on it, to be certain that the employer is not a lier.Knowing that this case is exceptional and givi

26、ng you the reason of your complaint, I would like to give you some kind of compensation. Next week, if you like, I will send you another administrative assistant, free of companys charge. I hope you reconsider this chance and write back an answer.Yours faithfully.)解析：解析 本文较为合理地完成了写作任务，基本涵盖了题目要求的主要内容

27、文章结构合理，语言使用基本准确，但仍有一些词汇和语法错误，比如“骗子”的英文说法并不是“lier”，而应该是“liar”。在倒数第二个自然段中，作者对于动词现在分词的用法也稍欠妥当。在对于句式的把握上，作者完成得比较好，但有些句式，如 but to be sure the next time I并不是准确的英文表达方式。虽然有些词语的使用并不妥当，但全文的语气基本符合书信的表达习惯，整篇文章尚能被读者所接受。(3).Question 4 Your Managing Director has decided that the companys website should be improve

28、d and has asked you to consider ways of going about this. Write a proposal for the Managing Director: summarising the strengths and weaknesses of the current website. suggesting new services and information to be provided through the website. explaining the benefits the improvements would bring.（分数：

29、2.00）_正确答案：(PROPOSAL ON WAYS TO IMPROVE XYZS WEBSITENOVEMBER 2002This proposal aims to set out various ways and possibilities available in order to improve our website.A SWOT AnalysisAs a result of a SWOT analysis, the following points summarise our main findings. StrengthsWe were the first major co

30、mpany in one sector to set up a website.We benefit from a very high rate of brand recognition and therefore internet users remember or find our site easily through search engines. WeaknessesOut of date: Despite being the innovators when launching our website, the information provided online is, in m

31、any cases, out of date (prices, phone numbers).Not user friendly. The structure of our paper is very rigid, potential customers cannot, do not have freedom of movement.No online purchase facility available.B Suggestions and RecommendationsIt was felt that in order to remain ahead of our competitors

32、we should carry out some of the following improvements. A more user friendly website allowing the user to have more freedom. Then, surveys have shown that such facility increases sales. Regular update of the information and services available. Such update will encourage our clients to consult our pa

33、per regularly and to keep them inform on any specific sale. Online purchase facility.It was felt that his facility is now a must-have for every big company.Such facility will also enable us to collect precious data which imported into our database will be a good marketing tool.By doing so we should

34、be able to keep our clients informed when we have sales on their favorite purchase. Online Newsletter Again, the use of our database could improve significantly our customer communication-such newsletter could be produced on a quarterly basis. FAQ a Frequent Ask Questions should be disnatured.C Bene

35、fits of such improvementsMost benefits have been explained above, however, we recommend strongly to carry out such improvements as soon as possible.This might be possible either by training our in-house marketing team on website production and management or by contracting a web designer specialist.

36、We would like to highlight the fact that although e-mail marketing is a very powerful tool, we must keep up to date with any legislation regarding data protection.)解析：解析 该习作完成得比较好。文章涵盖了题目要求的所有内容，阐述较为清晰。作者语言的使用比较自然，能够娴熟地使用长短句式，对于比较复杂的句式，如 eitherby都能够准确使用。本文运用了丰富的词汇且使用比较准确。但文章中也存在着少量的语法错误，如主谓一致问题。某些句子的表达不准确，如 potential customers cannot, do not have中，cannot 与 do not只保留一个即可。作者布局比较合理，每一个要点都用 ABC表达得非常清晰，但文章有些标点符号的使用不够准确。