高级写作-8及答案解析.doc

1、高级写作-8 及答案解析(总分：8.00，做题时间：90 分钟)一、写作题(总题数：2，分数：8.00)1.PART ONEQuestion 1 The bar charts below show levels of wheat production and wheat prices in a European country for the period 1990-2000. Using the information from the bar charts, write a short report summarizing the changes in production and pri

2、ces between 1990 and 2000. Write 120-140 words.（分数：2.00）_PART TWOWrite an answer to ONE of the questions 2-4 in this part. Write your answer in 200-250 words.（分数：6.00）(1).Question 2 You have recently attended the following one-day courses:Developing Your PotentialTrends in Electronic CommerceManagin

3、g PeopleReducing CostsYour companys Training Manager has asked you to write a short report about the training. Write the report for the Training Manager: describing the two courses which you found most useful, explaining how you benefited from them, outlining the specific training courses you would

4、like to attend next year, giving reasons why these courses would be useful to you.（分数：2.00）_(2).Question 3 Your manager has asked you to contact a local business school, inviting their students to apply for a three-month work placement in your company. Write a letter to the Principal of the business

5、 school: introducing your company and the idea of the placement, describing what work the placement would involve, explaining what skills and qualities the successful applicant should have, saying how the placement would benefit the applicant.（分数：2.00）_(3).Question 4 The Sales Director of your compa

6、ny wants to improve customer service and believes that this can be achieved by extending the opening hours of the Sales Department. He has asked you to write a proposal concerning improvements in customer service. Write a proposal for the Sales Director: summarising current problems concerning custo

7、mer service, evaluating the Sales Directors suggestion, presenting one or two other measures which could be taken, giving reasons for your preferred course of action.（分数：2.00）_高级写作-8 答案解析(总分：8.00，做题时间：90 分钟)一、写作题(总题数：2，分数：8.00)1.PART ONEQuestion 1 The bar charts below show levels of wheat production

8、 and wheat prices in a European country for the period 1990-2000. Using the information from the bar charts, write a short report summarizing the changes in production and prices between 1990 and 2000. Write 120-140 words.（分数：2.00）_正确答案：(IntroductionThe aim of this report is to summarise the changes

9、 in production and average prices of wheat between 1990 and 2000.FindingsFocusing our attention on wheat production, it can be seen from the graph that the output rose steadily over the period. A general upward trend from 0. 9 millions of tomes in 1990 to 2. 3 millions of tomes in 2000 is clearly re

10、cognizable.On the other hand, the average price of wheat totaled 1,400 /T in 1990, but in 1995 it increased rapidly reaching a peak of 2, 900 /T. In 2000 the price fell to 2, 400 /T which was however more than the minimum price in 1990.ConclusionAs can be seen from both graphs average price of wheat

11、 did not show the same characteristics as total wheat production.)解析：解析 该习作较好地完成了题目要求的写作任务，结构比较清晰，所用词汇和短语较丰富，例如：focus on，reach a peak；能运用恰当的连接词如 on the other hand，并且能够用到 focusing on这样的分词放在句首做状语的结构。句型的使用也较丰富，如：it can be seen that，as can be seen from等等。但也有小的错误，例如：more than the minimum price.结尾部分表达欠佳，但

12、并不影响整篇文章给人的好印象。PART TWOWrite an answer to ONE of the questions 2-4 in this part. Write your answer in 200-250 words.（分数：6.00）(1).Question 2 You have recently attended the following one-day courses:Developing Your PotentialTrends in Electronic CommerceManaging PeopleReducing CostsYour companys Traini

13、ng Manager has asked you to write a short report about the training. Write the report for the Training Manager: describing the two courses which you found most useful, explaining how you benefited from them, outlining the specific training courses you would like to attend next year, giving reasons w

14、hy these courses would be useful to you.（分数：2.00）_正确答案：(Report: Training coursesIntroductionThe aim of this report is to summarise and assess the training courses I have recently attended for the use of the Training Manager.CoursesIn my opinion, the most useful courses were: Managing people and Tren

15、ds in Electronic Commerce.“Managing People“ was a one-day course focused on management techniques and their successful implementation. It examined different management styles and their benefits and disadvantages.“Trends in Electronic Commerce“ was a practically oriented one-day course. The main issu

16、es discussed involved: the latest trends in e-commerce, security of information, business to business (B2B) trading and potential savings enabled by e-cornered.BenefitsBoth of these courses were very interesting for me, as I work as a Purchase Manager. I am going to use some of the management techni

17、ques in my department. I would like to improve the current approach to motivation or organization of meetings for example. I think that “motivating people“ is a key aspect of my job.“Trends in Electronic Commerce“ course was also very useful for me as we are set to start ordering process using the I

18、ntemet technology.ConclusionNext year, I would like to attend at least one of the following courses: Effective Negotiations, Time Management, Communication-a key factor for success.As all of these topics are closely related to my profession, I am sure that it would be to my and also companys benefit

19、 if I could attend these courses.)解析：解析 这是一篇比较好的习作，能够完成题目要求的所有写作任务。文章结构清晰，让人一目了然。语言使用清楚得当，词汇运用比较丰富。能够使用“I would like to”等表达句式，并能正确运用定语从句，例如：the training. courses I have recently attended for the use of the Training Manager.连接词的运用也较恰当如“as”。但文章中也有小的错误，例如：would be to my and also companys benefit，此外时态的运

20、用稍显混乱。(2).Question 3 Your manager has asked you to contact a local business school, inviting their students to apply for a three-month work placement in your company. Write a letter to the Principal of the business school: introducing your company and the idea of the placement, describing what work

21、the placement would involve, explaining what skills and qualities the successful applicant should have, saying how the placement would benefit the applicant.（分数：2.00）_正确答案：(27 March 2003To: Mr. Thomas GeorgeInvitation for a three-month placement for students in Zee Online Education Ltd.Dear Sir,Zee

22、Online Education is a leading multinational company in the field of online learning & e-learning. We offer specialized online courses in Computer Software. These courses are recognized by the government and also internationally. We would like to offer placements for a short period to students from y

23、our business school.The placement job would require students to do market research on certain important issues. Some of the areas of market research would be a) New Software required for the latest trends in the IT market, b) How well are online courses encouraging the growth of employment, c) Geogr

24、aphical area-relating to added use of a particular software. E. g: Places in the South of India like Coimbatore find that courses for textile design or CAD (Computer Aided Design) are popular-this is due to the large number of textile mills in the area.Market research involves a lot of confidence on

25、 the part of Students. An eye for detail, a pleasing personality and an assertive attitude would be a plus factor for a Student working in the area of market research. Connecting with people would be another factor. Students must be able to mingle freely with employees of the company they are resear

26、ching with. People skills help students go a long way in the areas of market research.A job placement like this would definitely be an added advantage to a students rsum. It would give him a wealth of experience in a short span of time. Fresh with the knowledge gained from the course a student will

27、be able to gain hands on experience, which will benefit the next step that he takes in his career.Yours Sincerely.)解析：解析 该文是一篇比较好的习作，完成了题目中要求的所有写作任务。尽管开头和结尾处所用的信函格式不正确，但整体的语言使用自然，一些短语和习惯用法的运用得当，例如：an eye for detail，in a short span of time，fresh with the knowledge。信函中使用了非常得体的礼貌表达方式，如：we would like to

28、the placement job would require students to do。词汇的使用也比较丰富，并且能够正确运用一些词语结构和句型，例如：require sb. to do，relate to，due to，定语从句“employees of the company they are researching with”。但也存在语法错误，如：people skills help students go a long way。(3).Question 4 The Sales Director of your company wants to improve customer

29、 service and believes that this can be achieved by extending the opening hours of the Sales Department. He has asked you to write a proposal concerning improvements in customer service. Write a proposal for the Sales Director: summarising current problems concerning customer service, evaluating the

30、Sales Directors suggestion, presenting one or two other measures which could be taken, giving reasons for your preferred course of action.（分数：2.00）_正确答案：(As it has been decided that changes in the customer service of the company ought to be made, the following points are brought up for attention:1.

31、Existing customer service is inadequate because:a) It is too slow in the attention to the client, andb) very often erroneous information is given to the client.Summarizing there is an evident waste of time and loss of client variability.2. Extending opening hours of the Sales Department, as suggeste

32、d by the Sales Director will solve the problem only partially due to the fact that-a) Not sufficient clients need the service during after-hours, andb) the root of the problem springs from the initial delay the customer generally has to suffer.3. Additional measures that should be studied for possib

33、le approval are:3.1-Passing phone enquiries directly to a call centre.3.2-Training junior salesman in customer service policy of the company.4. The selection of the above listed measures is based on the following information gathered from the Marketing and Personnel Departments as well as from a con

34、siderable amount of data obtained directly from the client and which pinpoint the following flaws:4. 1. Clients who telephone the company complain regularly of the excessive time they are kept hanging on the line until someone attends them.4.2. Another regular complaint from clients is that junior s

35、alesman are often unfamiliar or doubtful as to the after sales guaranty and services to which they are entitled when they have purchased one of our products.It seems obvious that junior salesmen are not getting sufficient training and that a possible special training programmed for them would solve

36、the problem in a short time and with little additional expenditure.)解析：解析 这篇习作较好地完成了题目中所要求的任务。文章连贯，结构清晰。语言使用比较自然。能够正确运用一些比较复杂的句型，例如：as it has been decided that, clients who telephone the company, it seems obvious that。词汇和短语的使用比较丰富，例如：sufficient，pinpoint，considerable，as well as，is based on。尽管存在几个小的语法错误，但并不影响其成为一篇较好的文章。