[外语类试卷]在职攻硕英语联考（作文）模拟试卷3及答案与解析.doc

1、在职攻硕英语联考（作文）模拟试卷 3及答案与解析 一、 Part VI Writing (30 minutes, 15 points) 1 Should We Ban the Dogs from the Cities? (1)有的人认为城市中应该禁止养狗。 (2)有的人认为不应该对此加以限制。 (3)我的看法。 2 Food Safety (1)近年来不断发生食品安全事故。 (2)为什么会频频出现这样的问题 ? (3)如何建立安全的食品供应体系 ? 3 My View on Job-Hopping (1)现在更换工作对许多人来说是司空见惯的事。 (2)为什么会出现这种现象 ? (3)你的看法。

2、 4 More Care for The Disadvantaged (1)在我国弱势群体已经形成。 (2)这个群体面临的各种问题。 (3)如何帮助弱势群体解决他们的问题 ? 在职攻硕英语联考（作文）模拟试卷 3答案与解析 一、 Part VI Writing (30 minutes, 15 points) 1 【正确答案】 Should We Ban the Dogs from the Cities? Dogs are friends of human beings. However, they are not welcomed all the times. Now, a considera

3、ble number of people are calling for a ban on raising dogs in the cities. A most irritating thing about dogs is they excrete wherever they find convenient, which pollutes the public places like park, the open areas of the residential quarters. This may be a threat to the pubic health. In addition, d

4、ogs, sometimes, may go wild as so to scare, or even worse, to bite people. Even though some dogs are mild-tempered, they still could be a nightmare for those who are afraid of dogs. Whats more, some dogs bark day and night, which is so disturbing that the neighbors can not have a rest. An equally la

5、rge number of people object to this suggestion. They argue that its completely wrong to ban the raising of dogs in the cities. In their opinion, dogs are good companions of human beings. They provide good company to the old, helping the old get over the loneliness when their own children can not spe

6、nd too much time with them. They also give the children living in the cities chances to get closer to animals, teaching them how to take care of the other living beings with kind heart. Even for the busy young people, raising a pet dog helps them relax after work. As far as I am concerned, I dont th

7、ink its a good idea to ban people from raising dogs. First, its unfair to drive dogs out of our life simply because they make some troubles, and we human beings happen to be the dominant beings of the nature. Its true that dogs waste, barking, and attack on human beings are annoying, but its not the

8、 dogs fault. The owners should be more careful when they walk the dogs, preventing them from getting too close to the old and the children, picking up the dogs excrement. The point here is not to ban the dogs out of our life, but to educate the dog owners so that they can be aware of how to make dog

9、s our true friends, and how to build a harmonious relationship between animals and the neighborhood. 【试题解析】 本文围绕关键词 “禁与不禁 ”，通过举例、因果分析等方法展开论述，论证充分恳切，具有说服力。作者抓住提纲特点，围绕题目客观地将正反两方观点进行综述，然后在此基础上确立自己的立场。在论述中，作者能够站在对方立场进行议论 (即承认取缔派观点的合理之处 )，从而使己方观点显得更加客观、中肯。这种以退为进的方法大大增强了作者观点的可信度。在语言方面，作者用词准确，段落之间及段落内部过渡与衔

10、接自然流畅。 【知识模块】 作文 2 【正确答案】 Food Safety Recent years has witnessed too many food safety problems in China, which arouse the public fears and concerns. Just in 2006 three big cases had been disclosed: the first one is about Sudan Red IV , a cancer-causing dye, which was used by the farmers in Hebei Pro

11、vince to feed ducks to make the egg yolk red; the second is about carcinogens, which was used by the farmers to feed the fish but could leave harmful, cancer-causing residues to increase their disease resistance; and the last one is about apple snails, which were popular food in Beijing but was foun

12、d to transmit parasitic disease. The scandals over the food appearing in China one after another reflect the weakness of governmental regulation and the dishonesty of some businesses. Although China has passed many laws and regulations concerning the food safety, lack of effective enforcement makes

13、the lawbreakers can not get deserved punishment. Moreover, some businesses put the profits before the consumers health. To make their products more attractive, they u-sually put some chemical supplement, which is harmful and sometimes even cause serious diseases. Since food safety problems not only

14、make the consumers scared but also disturb the order of the market, the government should take severe and urgent measures. The food firms without authorized production, business and hygiene licenses should be closed immediately. And a sound food quality supervision and management system should be es

15、tablished. At the same time, good companies should be rewarded by the government to encourage them to do better. 【试题解析】 文章内容充实、语言流畅、过渡自然。此文最突出的特点是每一段开头都用主题句直接有利地将提纲要点概括出来。特别是第二、三段的主题句，既起到承上启下的作用，又表明了该段议论的中心，丝毫没有使用firstsecondthird 这种连接词所产生的生硬感觉。此外，全文中通过词汇的重复或近义词的使用 (如： food safety problems， scandals

16、over thefood； arouse the public fears and concerns， make the customers scared， disturb the order ofthe market等 )使文章紧紧扣住提纲的关键词，增强内容上的连贯性。 【知识模块】 作文 3 【正确答案】 My View on Job-Hopping Job-hopping, or frequent changes of jobs, has become nothing unusual in todays China. Unlike the employees in the past wh

17、o preferred to stay in the same jobs for many years, now people, especially the young working in big cities, tend to change jobs very frequently. Why? With the economic boom, there are more opportunities for employment. So some tend to change their jobs whenever chances calls in the hope the new job

18、s might offer them higher salaries, better working conditions and more interesting positions. Some others, the young in particular, choose to change their jobs for variety. For them, doing the same work for too long a time may kill their creativity. So they hop from job to job to keep their desire f

19、or working in animation. Still others change their jobs just for the challenge a new position offers. I think it is a good thing for the workforce to be flexible, for the mobility will set the whole society in motion, which will undoubtedly push the country to further development. Nevertheless, too

20、frequent job-hopping prevents people from gaining valuable experience, an asset for personal development. 【试题解析】 文章围绕着现代人频繁跳槽的现象，深入分析了造成这种现象的原因。本文作者运用了分类法，句与句之间的衔接流畅、自然。文中Some Some othersStill others 这样的句型使整个段落结构严谨，浑然一体。本文的结尾段选择从正反两方进行评价，使论述显得中肯、可信。 【知识模块】 作文 4 【正确答案】 More Care for The Disadvantaged

21、 Since “the disadvantaged group“ was first mentioned in the Government Work Report, this special group draws more and more attention of the whole society. In our country, the disadvantaged group refers to people who are disadvantaged in abilities to create and accumulate wealth, and inferior in job

22、competition and having difficulties in daily life. Specifically, the disadvantaged includes farmers waiting for relief, the disabled, laid-off workers, some elderly people, and migrant workers, early retirees from government institutions and some disaster-stricken people. The disadvantaged currently

23、 faces four major problems-food, housing, medial care and childrens education, of which the latter two problems are the most worrying. Urban people living on unemployment insurance and rural people struggling in poverty cannot afford the doctors bill or save enough to pay for their childrens tuition

24、s. All this may threaten our countrys economic development and the social stability. So, these problems call for immediate solution To solve these problems, the government should improve the unemployment insurance system, so that all the urban poor can have their basic living standard guaranteed. Th

25、e government should also increase the input into social security expenditures, providing more subsidies to this special group. Whats more important, the government should offer low-cost or free medical care to the disadvantaged, and establish education assistance funds to help children from poor fam

26、ilies through their education. The fundamental solution, however, is to create more job opportunities by initiating re-employment programs. Without any doubt, all the problems are great challenges to both the government and the public. But we must succeed in the cause for our countrys future. 【试题解析】

27、 本文的提纲没有要求作者分析弱势群体形成的原因，而是侧重于问题的分析和解决这两个要素。因此本文作者开拓思路，围绕提纲，对弱势群体进行了定义，继而探讨了这个群体所面临的各种困难，并有针对性地提出了解决的方案。 全文思路清晰，说理透彻，观点鲜明。在语言表达方面，作者用词准确、表达到位，熟练地运用语言手段强调个人观点。如文中结尾段，作者提了四点改善弱势群体生存状况的建议 。在这里，作者针对上文重点讨论的问题 医疗保障和子女教育问题，特别强调了解决这两个问题的急迫性 (Whats more importantThe fundamental solution ， however， is) 。作者准确的语言表达增强了文章的表现力和说服力。因此，在写作中，大家应该权衡各个论点和论据之间的关系，区分主次、轻重，并在表达中适当运用增强语气的词或句型来突出论述重要的方面。 【知识模块】 作文