1、1第二讲 读后续写李仕才典例展示(2017浙江 6 月高考)阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。On a bright，warm July afternoon，Mac Hollan，a primary school teacher，was cycling from his home to Alaska with his friendsOne of his friends had stopped to make a bicycle repair，but they had encouraged Mac to carry on，and they would catch up
2、with him soon.As Mac pedaled(骑行)along alone，he thought fondly of his wife and two young daughters at homeHe hoped to show them this beautiful place someday.Then Mac heard quick and loud breathing behind him.“Man，thats a big dog！”he thought.But when he looked to the side，he saw instantly that it wasn
3、t a dog at all，but a wolf，quickly catching up with him.Macs heart jumpedHe found out his can of bear spray.With one hand on the bars，he fired the spray at the wolf.A bright red cloud enveloped the animal，and to Macs relief，it fell back，shaking its head.But a minute later，it was by his side again.The
4、n it attacked the back of Macs bike，tearing open his tent bag.He fired at the wolf a second time，and again，it fell back only to quickly restart the chase(追赶)Mac was pedaling hard now.He waved and yelled at passing cars but was careful not to slow down.He saw a steep uphill climb before him.He knew t
5、hat once he hit the hill，hed be easy caught up and the wolfs teeth would be tearing into his flesh.At this moment，Paul and Becky were driving their car on their way to Alaska.They didnt think much of it when they saw two cyclists repairing their bike on the side of the road.A bit later，they spotted
6、what they，too，assumed was a dog running alongside a man on a bike.As they got closer，they realized 2that the dog was a wolf.Mac heard a large vehicle behind him.He pulled in front of it as the wolf was catching up fast，just a dozen yards away now.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右；2应使用 5 个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3续写部分分
7、为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1：The car abruptly stopped in front of him. Paragraph 2：A few minutes later， the other two cyclists arrived.思路导航一、审题体裁 记叙文人称 第三人称时态 一般过去时所标出的关键词语表人物的有：Mac，Paul，friends表事物的有：home，wolf，bicycle，cars表动作的有：jumped，pedaled，climb前文大意Mac 与好友一起骑行去阿拉斯加，路上同伴因修自行
8、车落后，Mac 独自一人前行，遇到狼的突袭，于是他拼命逃，却得不到援助。这时，一辆车停在了他前面3二、抓住段首句设问续写段首 1：The car abruptly stopped in front of him.设问：Why did it stop? How did Mac feel? What would Mac/Paul do？.续写段首 2：A few minutes later，the other two cyclists arrived.设问：After they arrived，what did they see? How did they feel? What would the
9、y do？.三、谋篇(1)续写材料第一段所给的首句是 The car abruptly stopped in front of him.，在行文过程中应抓住关键词语 the car stopped，再发挥丰富的想象，把 Paul 停车后如何在千钧一发之际拯救 Mac 的过程写得趣味横生又合乎情理。(2)第二段所给的首句是 A few minutes later，the other two cyclists arrived.，起承上启下的作用。朋友到达之后看到、听到并做了什么。最后应该提炼思想性和体现价值观的传递正能量的元素(如珍爱生命，学会合作或感激等)，以提升文章的档次。(3)在续写时，除了
10、注意原文给出的关键词语，还需要注意以下线索：Why did the wolf chase Mac? What did Paul see when driving the car on the way to Alaska? He pulled in front of it as the wolf was catching up fast，just a dozen yards away now.Why did he stop the car?(4)在确定了思路和内容之后，续写时，要注意句子结构的多样性，语言的丰富性，并通过句与句之间连接词的正确使用，使上下文连贯。【参考范文】Paragraph 1
11、：The car abruptly stopped in front of him.Paul rolled down the window and yelled， “Man，get in the car！” Without any hesitation，Mac jumped off the bicycle and dashed into the back seat of the car.At the same time，the wolf caught up.Luckily，the cars door was firm enough to stop the wolf.However，they c
12、ouldnt just stay there.Because the wolf was under the protection of the law，they couldnt kill it.So Paul pressed the button of the horn to make an alert.Finally，the wolf left and disappeared.Paragraph 2：A few minutes later， the other two cyclists arrived.They were shocked to see 4that Macs tent bag
13、was in poor condition.And they were even more shocked to hear that he met a wolf.After a short rest，Mac was much better.So they thanked Paul and Beeky and decided to continue pedaling to Alaska.Time flew; the sun was hiding its last gold like a miser.Though tired，Mac thought of his wife and lovely c
14、hildren again.He had such a horrible but exciting experience to share!技法指导一、续写策略1读后续写不是随心所欲地写，而是要在所给段落开头和所标示关键词的帮助下完成续写部分(150 词左右)。其中，段落开头语与传统写作中的开头语类似，在某种程度上引导你的思路向哪方面发展，所续写部分不能脱离各自的段落开头语另起炉灶，要在其基础上进行拓展发挥。2续写所给语言材料多是记叙文之故事类文章，情节曲折跌宕，线索性和逻辑性较强。考生要抓住故事的叙事线索，依据原文的写作思路续写文章，并适当发散。3读后续写要求读写并重，需要考生对给定材料精确
15、理解，这样所续写部分才不至于偏离主题，就这方面而言，读后续写有点类似阅读理解题中对文章后续发展的推断，如：What would happen next?4续写部分的思路和内容并不一定是唯一的，考生可根据自己对上文材料的理解，对文章的结尾做出不同的诠释。二、续写步骤1精读文章，确定文章线索。每篇文章都有各自独特的写作思路。通过精读文章，找到该篇文章的写作线索，如是以时间为线索还是以空间为线索等，这样有利于考生“顺藤摸瓜(结尾)” 。2仔细审题，明确续写要求。3回扣原文，揣摩续写思路。根据文章后面的要求，再次快速回读短文，抓住文章的思路，结合续写段段首的提示语，最终确定续写段落的思路，同时结合文章
16、中标有下划线的关键词语，确定续写段落的内容。4拟定草稿，修改错词病句。5标出续写部分中使用到的原材料中标有下划线的关键词语(5 个以上)。三、续写方法1精读所给语言材料，理清文章脉络并明确作者的论点，确定文章主旨。52寻求前文与续写段段首句之间的内在联系，站在作者的角度，设计并发展情节，想象要合理，情节要连贯。3后续情节一般为故事的高潮或延续，是原作者声音的延续、态度的延伸，因此，要尽量符合原文思路，并求得与读者的心理共鸣，让读者回味无穷。4续写时心态要端正，所续写内容要积极、健康向上，把事物美好的一面展示出来。5利用自己已有的知识和经验，在继承原作者风格和语言基础之上，准确、地道地表达，充分
17、展示语言的表现力。提高关联词与过渡语的使用率，增强整句表现力。6如果所给短文为议论文，那么议论文中的段落首句多为主题句，观点鲜明。续写时，要围绕段落分论点确定论证方法，如正反对比、例证等。四、注意事项1词数要求：词数少于 130 的，从总分中减去 2 分。2与所给短文及段落开头语的衔接程度。3内容的丰富性和对所标出关键词语的应用。4应用语言结构和词汇的丰富性和准确性。5上下文的连贯性。实战演练阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。When I was eleven years old，I had a big accident.I get scared even now w
18、hen I think about that time.I went_skating near my house.There were many people，and I saw some of them falling on the ice.It was my first time to go ice skating，so I was nervous.I was wondering how to skate.I went with a friend who was very skillfulHe spent some time teaching me how to skate，but I d
19、idnt learn much.He left me and skated all around.As soon as he left，I fell_downI envied the other people because they could skate_wellI was bored because I kept falling so I took off my skates and just walked around on the ice in my shoes.It was cold and my hands were frozen.Suddenly，I stepped on so
20、mething that was not hard.What was it? It was a weak 6place in the ice.When I stepped there，I sank under the ice.I thought that I was going to die，but I did my best to grab something to get out from under the ice.I tried to grab the edge of the ice，but it was very difficult for an elevenyearold.It s
21、eemed like a very long time，like a year.Then，fortunately，someone helped me.He grabbed my arms and pulled me up.So，I lived and Im still alive today.I thanked him.At that time，my friend came back.I was annoyed at him because he was supposed to take_care_of_me，but he didnt.He was embarrassed.When I too
22、k a taxi home，the taxi driver was surprised and asked what had happened.I didnt want to say anything because I was tired and scaredEven now，whenever_I_think_about that time，I feel uncomfortable.I dont want to go skating again even now.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右；2应使用 5 个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为
23、你写好；4续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1：It was long before I went skating once again， Paragraph 2：However， ever since then I havent found any time to go skating， 思路导航思路点拨本文讲述了作者 11 岁去滑冰的一段经历，由于自己的滑冰技能不如别人娴熟，因而独自一人尝试练习总会跌跌撞撞，从而对滑冰这件事留下了不好的印象。7由续写第一段的提示语“ It was long before I went skating once again(很
24、久以后我才又一次去滑冰)”可知，这一次去滑冰，作者会抱着不一样的态度。那么首先得明确一点，对于这次滑冰，一定要有一个妥当的理由，不然作者自己是不会去的。显然，作者已不在是当时那个自己，他以前就不是特别擅长滑冰，因此他此次不会像当时那样独自一人去练习，而是极有可能同别人一起去的。与上一次的经历相比，这一次不会进展得特别顺利，但是起码有所进步，毕竟一次学好很难。那么，写作时宜注意练习滑冰以及有人陪同指导滑冰的细节问题。同时，在作者的心理活动方面，也是与过去滑冰时的心情有所变化的，那应是一个起伏的过程，此处对作者心情的描述可以客观中性些，对滑冰的恐惧情绪的描述则相对减弱些。由续写第二段的提示语“ H
25、owever， ever since then I havent found any time to go skating”可知，作者以后抽不出时间滑冰了，那么这一段应写一下作者为什么抽不出时间去滑冰的原因了，毋庸置疑，这势必与作者工作或家庭上的繁琐事情有关。换句话说，作者随着年龄的增长，找工作、结婚、抚养孩子等都有可能成为作者忙碌的理由。除此以外，随着时间的流逝，作者对滑冰的经历必然是有感悟的，那么就需要增加一些作者对过去或者未来的想法。最后，可尝试与前面的内容有所呼应。续写词汇已给提示词汇：went skating，skillful， fell down，skate well，fortun
26、ately，take care of me，scared，whenever I think about可能用到的词汇：advise，decide，follow ones advice，patiently，grateful，careful，lose heart，failure，face bravely【参考范文 1】Paragraph 1：It was long before I went skating once again, and that was when we graduated from the university.Our monitor advised us all to go
27、skating，and I decided to follow his advice although I still felt a little scaredSoon we were active on the ice.One of my roommates was very skillful and she patiently explained to me how to start.Step by step，I was able to stand up on the ice myself and headed out a little，not so steadily and I fell
28、_down many times.I was grateful to her 8for I managed to skate that day，though I couldnt be like others，who could skate_wellI had a nice time that day!Paragraph 2：However， ever since then I havent found any time to go skating, because immediately I dived into the applying for the suitable jobs.And t
29、hen，fortunately，I met my honey and got married.As was expected，one baby came into the world and was now smiling to me every day.As for the skating，maybe I could be on the ice again when my baby is grown up and asks me one hundred times!【参考范文 2】Paragraph 1：It was long before I went skating once again
30、, accompanied by one of my friends.This time I was careful and cautious，and my friend took_special_care_of_meI was so fortunate this time that I managed not to fall_downGradually I learned to skate_well and became skillfulI felt very confident and no longer scaredParagraph 2：However， ever since then
31、 I havent found any time to go skating, not because I do not want to go_skating，but because I am too busy working.Ive learned a lot from these two skating experiences.We all have moments of desperation.But if we can face them bravely，thats when we find out how strong we really are.Whatever you do，yo
32、u must have the patience to do it as well as the skill.Remember: never get too much pride because of victory or lose heart in case of failure.阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。An 80yearold man was sitting on the sofa in his house along with his 45yearold highly educated sonSuddenly a crow(乌鸦) perched(栖息
33、) on their window.The father asked his son， “ What_is_this？” The son replied， “ It_is_a_crow.”9After a few minutes，the father asked his son for the second time， “What is this？” The son said， “Father，I have just now told you，its a crow！”After a little while，the old father again asked his son for the
34、third time， “What is this？”At this time some expression of irritation(恼怒) was felt in the sons tone when he said to his father with a rebuff(生硬回绝) “Its a crow，a crow.” A little while later，the father again asked his son the fourth time， “What is this？”This time，the son shouted at his father， “Why do
35、 you keep asking me the_same_question again and again，although I have told you so many times IT IS A CROWAre you not able to understand this？”A little later the father went to his room and came back with an old tattered(发皱的) diary，which he had maintained since his son was born.On opening a page，he a
36、sked his son to read that page.When the son read it，the following words were written in the diary：“Today my little son aged three was sitting with me on the sofa，when a crow was sitting on the window.My son asked me 23 times what it was，and I replied to him all 23 times that it was a crow.I hugged h
37、im lovingly each time he asked me the same question.I did not at all feel irritated but I rather felt affection for my innocent son.注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右；2应使用 5 个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1：After reading the diary， Paragraph 2：10Feeling ashamed， the son
38、 got down on his knees before his father. 思路导航思路点拨本篇为记叙文。一位八十岁的老人和他的成年儿子坐在沙发上。同一个问题老人才问了三遍，儿子就已经十分恼怒和没耐心了；第四遍时，儿子已开始对他大吼了。伤心的父亲拿出一本发皱的日记让儿子读其中一页的内容：儿子小时候问了 23 遍同一个问题，父亲仍然耐心解释。由全文大意以及文章最后的结尾部分可知这里是父子不同态度的对比，上文叙述了父亲让儿子看自己的日记，由续写第一段 After reading the diary 可知，后面的内容应是儿子看了日记后的感受，以及对一些问题的思考。由续写第二段出现的关键词 f
39、eeling ashamed 可知，儿子对自己的行为感到愧疚，所以下文中儿子会对自己的行为道歉，然后向父亲保证以后好好对待父亲。续写词汇已给提示词汇：son，father，What is this？，It is a crow.，time，irritation，the same question，affection可能用到的词汇：tear，reflect，think back，patiently，old age，burden，apology，forgive，promise，care for，treat well【参考范文】Paragraph 1：After reading the diary，t
40、he son was filled with tears and began to reflect on the days when he used to sit together with his fatherHis father would patiently answer the_same_question all 23 times without feeling irritation while his father asked him the same question just four times! The son thought to himself: If I attain
41、old age，how will my son look at me? Will he think of me as a burden? Will he shout at me because of my poor sight，poor hearing or 11poor understanding?Paragraph 2：Feeling ashamed， the son got down on his knees before his father. He made an apology to his father，begging his father to forgive him for
42、his bad behavior.He said this aloud， “I promise to see you happy forever，Dad.It is you who have cared for me ever since I was a little child，showering your selfless affection on me.You worked hard to make money so that I could afford to go to university.I will serve you in the best day.”阅读下面短文，根据所给情
43、节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。I was touched through experiences，memories，books，stories，animals，angels，and most of all other people.People have moved me and molded(对影响重大) me with moments of love and examples of kindness.One time on the day before Christmas many years ago when I was a minimum wage mill worker，I f
44、ound myself with very little money and very little time to buy my small children a few simple toys.I knew that they would have to be cheap ones and I hoped my children would like them.I hated not having enough to give them more.I hated being poor.And I hated feeling bad at Christmas rather than happ
45、y.I pulled_into a store parking lot and counted my money again.It wasnt much but maybe I could get something small with it.As I was getting out of the car I noticed the Salvation Army bell_ringer at the entrance.I felt bad again because I didnt feel I could spare anything to give him.I started walki
46、ng towards the entrance when two cars pulled into empty parking spots in front of me.The first was a shiny，new Cadillac and I felt a twinge of jealousy when I saw it.“How nice， ” I thought， “Would it be to have enough money to buy a car like that.” The second car，though，was an ancient sedan(轿车) more
47、 beatup and rusty than the one I was driving.A man rushed out of the Cadillac and hurried into the store right past the bell 12ringer without a second glance.Out of the old sedan came a young mother with three small children in tow(紧随着)Her clothes looked as worn out as her car，yet she stopped in fro
48、nt of the bell ringer，smiled，opened her purse，and dropped a bill in his red kettle(钱罐)注意：1.所续写短文的词数应为 150 左右；2应使用 5 个以上短文中标有下划线的关键词语；3续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；4续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。Paragraph 1：I stood there for a minute in astonishment. Paragraph 2：In that second a warmth touched me， my jealousy and h
49、atred(憎恨) left me， and all the love and joy that are Christmas filled me. 思路导航思路点拨本文为夹叙夹议文。作者是一位收入很低的母亲，当圣诞节来临时，她很为孩子们的礼物犯愁。在商店外面时，她看到两辆对比鲜明的轿车，一辆是凯迪拉克豪车(Cadillac)，另一辆是破旧的轿车。可是让她惊讶的是，豪车车主对救世军撞钟人的募捐活动熟视无睹，倒是那位旧车车主慷慨解囊。由续写第一段出现的关键词 in astonishment 可知，续写此段时需注意作者的内心变化，下文应向令作者感到惊讶的方面写。在作者的描述中，从羡慕豪车的主人到最后看到他和开旧车的女士对待爱心捐助的不同行为之后，作者对他们的不同举动的思考，以及在她内心中对这两位人物所给予的评价，都可以算是作者的内心的起
